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Sunday, November 13, 2011

Succinctly yours: serene

Photo provided as prompt
Posted for Succinctly Yours, where we are asked "How low can you go?"
A photo prompt is provided by Grandma's Goulash and we are invited to write a short story about it (in 140 words or less) or else a short-short story using 140 characters including spaces or punctuation.
There is also a word of the week, offered by Grandma's daughter, Calico, before she sees the photo. This week's word is serene.

I have used the word of the week and included it in 138 characters thusly:


Nothing was serene about the harbor except the hill behind it, and the calm water of the bay. Behind closed doors, serenity had no chance.

15 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Ah, behind the doors serenity can be rare indeed. Great take.

Jo Bryant said...

now this is clever - really clever

Lisa Ricard Claro said...

My fave today. This is terrific. You haven't just met the challenge, you really nailed it with a great story. Your word imagery is spot-on. Love it.

Mama Zen said...

This is really good. And, sadly, too true.

SparkleFarkle said...

"Most people lead lives of quiet desperation, and go to their graves with the song still in their heart." --Henry David Thoreau

"oh, sigh..." --SparkleFarkle

Jim said...

You did good Kay!
Your micro-F reminded me of an
old Charlie Rich CW song,
Behind Closed Doors:

"My baby makes me proud
Lord, don't she make me proud
She never makes a scene
By hanging all over me in a crowd
'Cause people like to talk
Lord, don't they love to talk
But when they turn out the lights
I know she'll be leaving with me

And when we get behind closed doors
Then she lets her hair hang down
And she makes me glad that I'm a man
Oh, no-one knows what goes on behind closed doors

...

Pooch said...

Stark reality, beautifully expressed.

:)

Sonia Lal said...

So true! (at this port or on top of the mountains)

Esther Garvi said...

Loved it!

Dianne said...

Ah! just perfect Kay it captions the photo beautifully.

Dianne said...

well done
you just described life in 138 characters

Ann said...

this photob looks a bit like Sibu town where I grew up. The river has run so low that it is not funny. Can you imagine I used to swim in it?

Tammy said...

Amazing. You just wrote a whole novel in 138 characters! Nicely done.

Pat said...

Great contrast and use of serene! You're right about no sampans. Maybe it's somewhere in southeast Asia.

Akelamalu said...

No-one knows what goes on behind closed doors! You really could expand this story, intriguing!