Sunday, December 2, 2012

Sunday Mini-Challenge
Imaginary Garden with Real Toads

When I Grow too Old to Dream*

minaret, minotaur,
a dancing horse and a monkey
with music coming from afar
very funky
my dreams are getting more and more bizarre

my books in this field are
few and decidedly lacking
oneirocritic authors are
without backing
from halls of academe both near and far

checked my idea jar
for the name of that cute gypsy
though doctors might be best by far
(not as tipsy)
meanwhile I’ll consult my favorite star

Jupiter and Mars marred
by a lack of understanding
and love doesn’t steer the stars
peace not guiding**
so now I’ll never know what my dreams are

*   Oscar Hammerstein II
** The 5th Dimension

Posted for the
at the online writers' group Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. Kerry presented us with a poem by artist and poet Dante Gabriel Rossetti (not Dante Alighieri, thank goodness, although he was the younger man's idol) and asked us to write to the form:
6 syllables -- A rhyme
8 syllables -- B rhyme
8 syllables -- A
4 syllables -- B
10 syllables -A — and following stanzas have C, D, etc., instead of the B rhyme, but retain the A rhyme throughout.
The thing I found most difficult today was remembering that the first line was to be only 6 syllables, followed by two lines of 8. I kept using 8 syllables in the first line and having to rewrite it.


Anonymous said...

This was a lot of fun, Kay. You made the form very colloquial. That was lovely. k.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow. So well done. I couldnt manage it at all. Love the school photo!

Mama Zen said...

This is so fun and whimsical! Great job with the form.

Ella said...

Wow, well done! I love your gorgeous photo :D You did so well with this form and I love how you guided us, with your poem~
@>----------- xo

Kerry O'Connor said...

Wow! You rocked the form, and had a lot of fun doing so, Kay.

Emma Major said...

Brilliant and so funny, love it

Hannah said...

between dreams and reality...I love the succession of this piece and I agree your photo is wonderful... great write!

Heaven said...

I like the thoughts of having funky dreams and fun ideas in the jar ~ Not too old to dream and I like that photo ~ Smile is precious ~

Daryl said...


Friko said...

Seems like a great deal of work to me. You did well!