Friday, December 7, 2012

A novel letter to Santa

Mama Zen has asked members and followers of the online writers' group, Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, to write a letter to Santa using 50 words or less.
Verbose as I am, it was a struggle, but I managed to keep it right on the wire at 50. I don't know how Mama Zen manages to pack so much fire and life into so few words, but I intend to observe her at Real Toads for the next millennium or so, to see if I can figure it out.

Santa dear
I sadly fear
we’ve got too much stuff—

I’d like, this year,
please, Santa dear,
someone who’d get tough
to rid the house of everything
we really never need—

the broken
the redundant
the unused and the ugly—

just leave our little hobbit house
adorable and snuggly


Mama Zen said...

I love it! And, when they're done with your house, they can come work on mine!

Ella said...

I love the warmth
Your words share
Craving a fresh start
Hobbit homes are
Clever n cute

aprille said...

You forgot the 'just in case...'.

Phil said...

That plea sounds almost heartfelt Kay. Stopped by for the birds.

Kerry O'Connor said...

It is an adorable hobbit house! And all those things in it make it home.

Margaret said...

So Cozy, this poem (and your home)

Hannah said...

I know what you mean...I feel the need to let go of things right now...wish it could all go to people needing things. It's certainly a process. :) I enjoy the rhyme, Kay!

Susan said...

Love it! I think every word here is essential. You and lots of others are asking for things I'd love to have as well. Do you think a Santa with the power to do this could also cut the fat off our poems?

Laurie Kolp said...

I know what you mean and couldn't agree more.

Other Mary said...

Oh this is great! And you kept just enough words in this :o)
I think that's a problem for almost all of us who aren't in absolute, abject poverty. I know that's on my list of resolutions too! Merry Christmas Kay!

Poet Laundry said...

We do this too...why do we want to save everything? And yes, adorable and snuggly is just right.

Kateri said...

Totally love this! :) I could use the exact same thing.

Mary said...

I hear you on this! Words well spoken!

Susie Clevenger said...

I love it!! I should have asked Santa for the same thing!!

Rinkly Rimes said...

You've hit the nail on the head! We could all do with a stuffless life!

Jennifer A. Jilks said...

My birthday, being Dec. 26th, hubby bought me a zoom lens for birthday & Xmas! My Christmas is over!

Marian said...

nothing better than an adorable hobbit house. nothing!