The first line makes a statement about a subject, and the second line progresses to a description of the subject. In the third line, a new subject is introduced with a statement. The fourth line unites the themes of the first three lines.
This evening, I heard from a friend whose infant son has shown he is no longer a helpless infant, and her news made me think of this challenge.
my young friend’s son is no longer a newborn:
he can now roll from his back to his stomach.
the young birds left their nests in the spring.
young men leave home later than young birds, but leave they must.
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| Photo copyright Kay Davies and Richard Schear, 2008 |
10 comments:
Yes, leave they must, once the mother bird has grown so attached over the years she feels quite plucked!
Lovely subject for your koan, Kay.
This kind of Chinese sculpture must take in so much work, it's impressive!
God bless you!
Cezar
True this ~ For my kids, not too soon though ~ As long as they are single, I don't mind them staying with me ~
I've never heard of Koan poetry until now, Kay. Well done! I hope you're having a healthy and happy weekend. Is it also hot in your area? (I heard about the heatwaves in the US and wondered if you were affected as well. A big hug for you and pat for Lindy. Jo
Oh fer sure the perfect pairing of topic to nature!! Well done and your image brings even more the orient!! Enjoyed, Kay!!
Thanks for introducing me to the Koan. Beautiful poem and picture!
Oh that first roll towards independence. Perfectly done, this koan!
Very nicely done! Lovely parallel between the birds and the kids.
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aw!
I, too love your poem and that you tied birds with young men! Well Done :D
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