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After some lengthy do's and don'ts as to syllable count and line length based on "a consonance between mathematics and the aesthetic building blocks of art", all of which gave me two headaches, a stomach ache, and considerable biliousness, I decided to follow the little diagram of sorts Hedge provided for such poor students as I.
"In mathematics, the Fibonacci numbers," she says, "or Fibonacci series or Fibonacci sequence are the numbers in the following integer sequence:
0,1,1,2,3,5,8,13,21,34…"
Right, Hedge, and I believe in your fibs, I really do.
I quite agree, however, that going up to 34 syllables in one line could prove a trifle unwieldy, so I have chosen to use the 0,1,1,2,3,5,8 syllables and then throw the whole Fib into reverse.
The un-Love Potion
by Kay Davies, August 24-25, 2013
take
once
darling,
just once now,
and you’ll disappear
from your lover’s beseeching glance,
but should you want your lover’s glance
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sweeping o’er your face
take this not
my dear
not
now
18 comments:
I never knew that the word "fib" is from a real, albeit, strange word. Wow and I love your Un-love Potion poem. Kay, you are just too good! (((Hugs))) Jo
Hari Om
...........aaaaarrgggle
You did good Kay... 8~0 YAM xx
This is brilliant, Kay - quite perfect. It puts my efforts to shame but I enjoyed writing them, all three. It's all or nothing with me;-)
What if they don't read the instructions first?
I like the fib form and back ~ Not now, was the perfect ending ~ Lovely work on the form Kay ~
Happy Sunday ~
What a very interesting subject you chose for your poem, Kay.
Hey, don't blame this on me. I could never do the math. ;_) I loved your tongue in cheek intro, Kay, and all the pretense that you had no idea what was going on--then you whip out a perfect example of the form, full of magic, and one which for some reason seems to have a deeper resonance than the words alone imply. Thanks for playing, my friend, and I hope you're feeling better.
Very cool, Kay!
wow, love this, Kay, eerie.
you are a fibber, Kay. a magical one, at that ~ M
Kay this was clever-I loved how you did yours~ I want to try this form again~ YOUR insight always makes me smile ;D
I love the back and forth, round and round rhythm of your Fib!!!!
How cool is this! to use formality against itself and backwards.
awesome ... anything with math involved makes me break out in hives
Good on you! You work hard at this!
So glad I popped in today! I love Fibonacci poems, and you did a terrific job with yours. Love it! I've written a few, but none as well done as yours.
Very impressive, Kay. I don't know how you do it.
Magical and practical! What in the potion, dare I ask?
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