Wednesday, July 25, 2012

Real Toads: wish I could write like MZ

The soul of both brevity and wit is Mama Zen, a member of the online writers' group Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. MZ can say more in a few words than I can say in a month.
Today she challenges members and other contributors alike to "explore the oft unappreciated art of not writing"...that is, keep words to a minimum, and she's going to issue the same challenge once a month now.
So, if I want to overwrite, I can't do it here. 35 words maximum, that's the rule.

Photo by Kay Davies, July, 2012

silver skeleton—
what scenes
you must have seen
while you lived


Anonymous said...

I LOVE this! Particularly in conjunction with the photo. I don't think the dead tree reference can be seen without the accompanying photograph. But yes, trees must have some incredible stories to tell---especially living such long lives and likely never moving from one spot.

aprille said...

Blue and silver, still and moving, wet and dry, and all this full of seaside sibilants. And I always like the scene-seen type rhymes. All that in eleven words.

Susie Clevenger said...

I love this...the photo and your words tell a story that leaves the reader to fill in the blanks.

Grace said...

Love the pairing of the words with your picture Kay ~ There are sure a lot of stories from those silver skeleton ~

Enjoyed your share dear Kay ~

Mama Zen said...

Kay, this is GORGEOUS! I feel like I just got schooled!

Kateri said...

Now that is poetry wrapped up in few brief words!

Susan said...

There it is, about the size of a postage stamp! Reading it with the picture, I am thrilled to see the regal frame of he tree still upright as if it wanted to hug, to talk.

soft lovely sounds: "Silver skeleton"
"scenes" "seen"

Without the picture, it is a skeleton of some live thing.

In either case, time for observing is over, now it is a monument to what has passed and perhaps a conduit for mermory.

Quick, simple, a little awe.

Ella said...

Kay, This is amazing!
I too want to take lessons from you~
YOU have Zen skills...

izzy said...

A nice piece of your world! thanks.