Wednesday, July 25, 2012

Missed the point in Real Toads challenge

I was so busy thinking about brevity, I missed the part where Mama Zen asked us to describe our worlds in 35 words or less.
My world today can be summed up in my Facebook status update: "Note to self: when juicing, remember to put a cup under the spout."
Only 13 words, but it wasn't written for this prompt.

My previous submission here contained fewer words than that, but didn't describe my world, because it included a photo taken while I was visiting an island off the coast of British Columbia, my home province. world 35 words...

snore of dog
louder than wind in trees.
trees: tallest things
on my horizon—
no mountains,
no hills on this prairie,
no ocean anywhere.
I am an alien
I live here now
and it's good.

Photo by my husband, Richard Schear, July, 2012

Posted for Mama Zen's brevity challenge at the online writers group


Laurie Kolp said...

The first one made me laugh... I love the second one.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I so loved the note to self!!!!! My sistah-woman! love the poem, the wind in the trees, the feeling like an alien but that life is good anyway. Awesome.

Grace said...

your prairie life is looking good ~ thanks for sharing the picture too ~

Mama Zen said...

You had me laughing with "snore of dog." That's my world, too!

Susan said...

I love it! An alien in a good place with dog and tree and wind and sound to build on. And exactly 35 words.

Ella said...

Wow, I can so relate to this view~
I love wind in the trees :D

Kay said...

Aha... so Lindy snores loudly does she? This is beautiful, Kay.

Mara said...

35 words or less: your no cup juice would have fitted nicely.

Vaishali Jain said...

HILARIOUS! - "Note to self: when juicing, remember to put a cup under the spout." :D

The second one is a sweet poem. Loved it! :)

Marian said...

yes! "i am an alien"