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Sunday, October 17, 2010

Microfiction Monday: The Prisoner



The prisoner knew she'd fit through one of the windows, but instead had to watch her captors filling in all the exits, brick by slow brick.
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This is my
second attempt at 



hosted by Susan at Stony River.

The idea is to copy the photo Susan provided, then write a short (very short) story about it...in only 140 characters! For someone who always overwrites, this is an excellent exercise.

26 comments:

Diane said...

Great job. I'm sure it was scary to watch that filling in.... :O(

Peggy said...

Scary thought, wouldn't like to have to watch!
Nicely done Kay!

anthonynorth said...

Not a nice thing to watch, but nice write.

Pat said...

And I'm sure that if she dashed out one of the openings, the king would have her killed. A sad tale. Well done!

Bill ~ {The Old Fart} said...

Ever so painful to watch something so slow happen. You are doing well at the Microfictions.

Fay's Too said...

I. . can't . . . breathe. . .

gospelwriter said...

That would be awful, having to watch "brick by slow brick" and seeing no escape. Nice MM

Ms.Daisy said...

Ooooh, I wouldn't be able to just stand there - I'd have to use that pointy shovel and...do something! HA! Nice MM Kay!


~Jean

KB said...

That would scare me half to death. Well done.

Greyscale Territory said...

There is something quietly threatening about newish bricks creating a wall alongside old stone! Interesting micro!

Kay said...

Very good, Kay. I tried to think of something clever, but my brain went to sleep.

EG Wow said...

EW! How very sad!

sylviamorice said...

The poor dear...too bad she hadn't thought of using those garden tools as weapons...surely to die fighting is better than to die by giving up...

Have a great week. Cheers!

septembermom said...

I can't imagine that feeling. Good job!

Rigel said...

Sent shivers. It's scary to think that all she could do was watch. Loved it. Especially that it's scary.

Madeleine said...

LOL! That's men for you ;O)

izzy said...

Yup our girls think alike!
thanks for visiting-

Templeton's fury said...

i was thinking that when i looked at this picture. did they not notice the window? lol

G-Man said...

Another gem Kay...This Rocked...G

Michael G-G said...

Nothing less than torture!

Nice one, Kay. Have a great week.

Susan Fobes said...

You're right about the windows-LOL! And I believe she is at ground level...

hope said...

Not exactly the royal treatment, huh?

Marina said...

very good story!

quilly said...

You know, I don't feel sorry for her since she is just standing and watching. I guarantee if it were me a few of them would be trying to figure out how to plug pitchfork holes in their back sides, and the rest would be dodging bricks.

Kay L. Davies said...

@ Jean and Quilly -- you're both right, of course. I'd fight and kick and scream and do them as much damage as I could, but she looks wimpy, in my not-so-humble opinion.
-- K

evenstarwen said...

Don't despair, Lady. They forgot about the spades. You can always did a tunnel out.

Great microfiction!