Saturday, January 26, 2013

For Real Toads: last becomes first

Here’s the challenge: Look at five to ten of the latest poems you wrote and find last lines that are rich with possibility for a new beginning...the first line (or two) of the new poem—long or short—that you write this weekend.

My friend Susan at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, issued the challenge above. I looked up the poems that have appeared on my blog since September, and chose ten lines, hoping one of them would work.

Susan showed us an example of a ghazal, but my poem is a free verse last-line poem instead.

in what emotion was I caught
when all my heart and mind were fraught
with terror over spending
eternity alone?
Richard Schear photo, 2012
eternity alone
can break
the universe,
one solar system at a time,
and time alone
can mend my mind,
and heal this heart
of stone.

Kay L. Davies, January, 2013


Susan said...

Wow--Fear of an eternity of aloneness as also fear of healing a heart of stone which could then free your narrator of the aloneness! Such are the circles we often weave and truly, I have found, I keep them as long as they are useful. I love this tightly woven free verse. Did you chose your line rom a poem that you could point me to? Link it here so I can come back and read it. I like seeing how far from or close to the old the new poem resides.

Mary said...

Whew, Kay...this is a deep one. I think there could be no worse hell than to spend eternity alone. Really.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I find the entire concept of this poem intriguing, Kay, and I love the way you have spun out the philosophy line by line. The link from stanza two to three is just excellent.

Loredana Donovan said...

So true, time alone can heal a broken heart. Wonderfully written! :)

Tammy said...

Oh, Kay. What a lovely, lovely poem.

Emma Major said...

I feel like you wrote this for me, it is exactly how I am about being on my own, amazing

Jennifer A. Jilks said...

This is beautiful, indeed. You work hard at this. Good for you.

Heaven said...

I agree, time is a great healer, now matter how long it takes ~

I am enjoying the pictures you post ~

Kim Nelson said...

You really made me think. Have never considered the notion of spending eternity alone, and I love being alone in this life. But forever? Eek!

Judy Roney said...

To spend eternity alone is a thought provoking poem. We need the balance as the third voice says to me. Aloneness can be good for us.

Susie Clevenger said...

I so enjoy my time alone...I can think what I wish and do some mental closet cleaning...Great poem!!

Panchali said...

The mere thought of 'To spend eternity alone' freaks the hell outta me...but,
c'est la vie, my friend!
Very well put.:)

Marian said...

this actually struck a bit of terror in me, very effective.

Hannah said...

Yes!! SO true. Time alone can bee so sweet and so bitter, both!! Love these thoughts, Kay!!

Ella said...

I love the thoughts that gather reading this circular wonder you wrote! It makes us wake up and move into the now..go do, be more, do more, ....I need to make more friends! I fear that tower... lol
Well done