Sunday challenge at the Imaginary Garden

I didn't quite succeed in writing loop poetry for Grace's challenge this weekend at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads.

The challenge was to write a poem in which the second line started with the word from the end of the first line, and the third with the word from the end of the second, and so on.

I plead my infirm health for the fact that I didn't quite succeed. But I came close. Some of my lines start with the word(s) that ended the previous line.

Grace says the form was created by Hellon. I don't believe Hellon and I have met one another, so perhaps I needn't panic. It still seems like a lovely idea, this loop poetry, and I'll try it again another time when I'm feeling less loopy and more poetic.

Meanwhile, here is my something of a contribution for this weekend.

Wikipedia sketch

The Rehearsal

it won’t be possible to go

to go to her as I would like

like days of old when we were young

seeing her now is like a taste

a taste of sadness on my tongue

  

tongue-tied now, I cannot say

say what I long to say to her

words strangle me on their way out

out of my mouth, but it is true

Wikipedia

French actor Coquelin

true as birds come home to nest

to nest with her is my desire

but if I can’t say the words to her

I’ll never say them to her sire

sire, my lord, my liege, my king

I love your daughter dearly

dearly now and evermore

and evermore more dearly...

by Kay L. Davies,
October 13, 2013