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Saturday, October 13, 2012

Real Toads: Sunday mini-challenge

When I'm at my best, I love to challenge myself with specific poetic forms, as Kerry challenges us at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads. However, for this weekend's Sunday mini-challenge, I'm glad she has given us a free verse option, stipulating the poem must written specifically for one of the prompt photos.
Included as inspiration are photos by these talented Real Toads members: Isadora Gruye, Margaret Bednar, Ellen Wilson, and Susie Clevenger.
I chose the free verse, instead of working with this weekend's envelope quatrain, as soon as I saw Susie's amazing photo.

© Photo by Susie Clevenger


if hunger died around the world,
if babies cried no more,
would peace then follow
as day follows night?

or

would people, hollow-
hearted, still then fight?

yes

for oil they’d fight
as once, for gold,
they threw
their lives
away

because

they have no fear
who have no love


13 comments:

Dimple said...

Hmm. I don't know how to comment on poetry. But the last bit reminded me: perfect love casts out fear.

Thanks for coming by Kay. I have just been getting back to blogging after a very busy summer. I still only find a fraction of the time I had before, but as the season progresses, that may change. I hope!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Wow, Kay, this is simply STELLAR. Especially "they have no fear who have no love". That says it ALL , kiddo! Very impressive work.

Laura Maria said...

Very thoughtful piece. I don't think ending hunger woud bring world peace either. It is a matter of the heart and you expressed it beautifully.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I like your approach to free verse, Kay. The way you set out your lines creates maximum impact for your message. It is sad that humanity will always find something to fight about and hunger: physical, emotional and spiritual is often the result.

Jo said...

Wonderful Kay. Your last line is profound. You have such brilliant talent and I love that you share it here. Blessings Jo

Phil said...

Well composed verse Kay. It left me wondering about the whys and wherefores of the stone.

Hannah said...

I agree with Sherry...these lines in brevity with clarity, Kay, very affecting!! :)

Kim Nelson said...

Enjoyable read, Kay, the flow of verse and visual aspect of the composition make it unique, interesting.

Susan said...

O
Kay
WOW
sad
true
effectively
metered
down
to
no
love.

amidemanila said...

You have a heart of gold

Susie Clevenger said...

I wish ending hunger would end war, but sadly humans seem to have so much anger and would continue to fight. You ended it profoundly. Beautiful piece.

Mary Mansfield said...

Unfortunately, fighting seems to be a part of human nature. Perhaps one day we'll learn to rise above! Love those last two lines! Very nicely done!

manicddaily said...

I think this is very powerful. Agh. People will always find something to fight about.

You use the form and the departures from the form very effectively here! k.