Wednesday, March 5, 2014

Insomnia, the bane of night's existence

For "Words Count" over at the Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, our mistress of the well-chosen word, Mama Zen, has asked us to write about insomnia. Companion of my nights, murderer of my days, insomnia...
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I wrote the book
on insomnia,
but I’ve forgotten
where I put it.
pacing the floor,
night after night,
I took insomnia
and dissected it,
examined its every molecule,
every nuance,
every characteristic
so characteristic
of my nights with it.
I became one
with insomnia,
ate it, drank it,
all but slept with it—
that I could not do.
Kay Davies, March, 2014
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Rewritten to 60 words in keeping with the "Words Count" challenge.


23 comments:

  1. Love the last lines! Stephen King is WAY to creepy for me, though!

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  2. OK, this first line is a killer, I wish I had written not only this but the entire poem!

    Kiss.

    <3

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  3. No, I suppose not! It's a dirty rotten tease.

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  4. Perfect! Of course you couldn't sleep together. Sounds like you could write that book again.

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  5. Cackling. This is perfect. I am having a cup of tea right now, KNOWING it means my eyeballs will be glued open all night tonight. But I just really needed a cuppa. Sigh. So I shall be keeping you company tonight, kiddo. The other thing is, I really really hate my C-PAP machine. It disturbs my sleep and I fling it off in the wee hours. Argh.

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  6. Loves me some Stephen King.
    Love this. That last line ROCKS.

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  7. Kay, I agree with Mama Zen...This is perfect!!

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  8. ha! you *know* that insomnia's been in a LOT of beds! ~

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  9. Kay, you described insomnia perfectly. I love the first line. I can say that Stephen King's Insomnia is not a book to read when you are trying to fall asleep. :)

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  10. Great to hear from an "expert"! Your words really put me in the moment!

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  11. This, while being light and tongue in cheek, nonetheless names every nail in the coffin of sleep that insomnia works so hard to hammer all night long. Love the ending--just perfect.

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  12. yeah, this is a good one. that book soooo describes the grip of it, too.

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  13. This is really clever, Kay. I love your opening gambit and treating the abstract as if it were concrete was inspired.

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  14. This is great, Kay! You are amazing! I love your closing line also.

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  15. You are so good at poetry, Kay!
    I love this one. I still haven't managed a poem lately.
    Don't know why!
    Luv,
    J
    (ツ) from Cottage Country Ontario , ON, Canada!

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  17. Insomnia a companion that no one wants. Rightly said Kay! Nicely!

    Hank

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  18. Clever as always, Kay. And how appropriate that an aging Stephen King has written about this horrific "murderer of...days!"

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  19. I am glad to say I don't suffer from insomnia. Only once was I not able to sleep at all and spend the night roaming the house. Worked all day and slept like a log the next night. Fortunately!

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  20. But you don’t seem to have got cross with it.
    Insomnia, a horror night to spoil the day.

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  21. Yep, I've had many dates with Mr. Insomnia!

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