Wednesday, August 7, 2013

Words count: Mama Zen's voodoo challenge


I’m coming there to haunt you
coming to scare you to death.
I’m warning cause I want to
be sure you’re holding your breath.
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You’ll wait for me to come there:
never know exactly when.
You’ll fear for me to get there,
knowing it will be your end.
*
And then when I get near
you will be the last to know—
getting there from out here
to deliver you your last blow.


Posted for
Mama Zen's Words Count challenge
Artwork: 17th century Persian anatomy drawing from Wikimedia Commons

MZ, herself the very soul of brevity and wit
has asked us to write a voodoo poem in 73 words or less.
I have used 73 words.


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20 comments:

  1. UnknownAugust 7, 2013 at 3:07 PM

    this is ultra creepy - like the chant from nightmare on Elm Street - 1,2 freddy's coming for you...

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  2. Kay L. DaviesAugust 7, 2013 at 3:18 PM

    Thanks, Sam. I was afraid to see Nightmare on Elm Street, but I'll take "ultra creepy" as a compliment in a voodoo challenge.
    K

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  3. Susie ClevengerAugust 7, 2013 at 4:27 PM

    My, my creepy image and words. You have this spell thing down..love it!

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  4. SusanAugust 7, 2013 at 4:28 PM

    Bwahaha. I probably could cast a spell, or at least gather the ingredients in a poem, but I fear its power. I'll wait until I can imagine a way ... wait! I've got an idea!

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  5. Sherry Blue SkyAugust 7, 2013 at 4:51 PM

    Oy! Great write!

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  6. MargaretAugust 7, 2013 at 7:15 PM

    And this can't help but come true. We all will receive a visit some day:). The question is, do we live in dread? Ha. Love this

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  7. Maude LynnAugust 7, 2013 at 7:53 PM

    This is perfect, Kay! To me, rhyme always works well with creepy.

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  8. KayAugust 7, 2013 at 8:38 PM

    You have the most incredible imagination. This would cause nightmares.

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  9. JoAugust 7, 2013 at 8:46 PM

    Oooh - eee, Kay! Very creepy. You're so good with words. Ironically I used the word ZEN in my Word Teaser phone game yesterday and it told me it was wrong! Have a great day. (((Hugs))) Jo

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  10. Maggie GraceAugust 7, 2013 at 9:47 PM

    Just saw a preview for a movie called "You're Next". Have never watched those movies. Am sure whomever you are going after deserves this. Fear is a spell all its own with great power. Wonderful!

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  11. Yamini MacLeanAugust 8, 2013 at 1:38 AM

    Hari Om
    ...and you have captured the essence of Voodoo which is merely to instil the very fear of fate into the subject of focus. In OZ the aboriginals have their own version - called "pointing the bone". Marvellous work Kay! YAM xx

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  12. TALONAugust 8, 2013 at 8:02 AM

    I'm ducking and I'm running, Kay! :) Seriously creepy!

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  13. hedgewitchAugust 8, 2013 at 8:22 AM

    An incantation to raise the neck hairs, Kay. Great rhyme and meter.

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  14. Kerry O'ConnorAugust 8, 2013 at 10:15 AM

    Ooh, this is a grand and enchanting rhyme, Kay.

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  15. HannahAugust 8, 2013 at 10:44 AM

    This is perfect paired with the image you found, Kay!! Wow...skin-crawling creepy!

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  16. LolamouseAugust 8, 2013 at 12:58 PM

    Kay,
    Very creepy. Probably because it's true!

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  17. HelenAugust 8, 2013 at 4:43 PM

    Kay, this is inspired poetry ... loved it!!

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  18. grapelingAugust 8, 2013 at 6:27 PM

    nicely spooky, Kay :)

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  19. kaykualaAugust 8, 2013 at 6:58 PM

    And then when I get near
    you will be the last to know

    Sure is scary Kay, but love it! It gives a twist to the element of challenge and anticipation! Nicely!

    Hank

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  20. AnonymousAugust 8, 2013 at 9:45 PM

    Oh, Kay, I didn't know you could get this creepy!! Loved seeing this side of you. The fact that you even got it all to rhyme is impressive, espec. considering Mama's word count rules. He's coming to get us all, but why not, you know, slip us a Valium first? (wink) Amy

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